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SwordFighters:
The Unbreathable Planet

Written and created by Kazumi Mai


Prologue

    The Unbreathable Planet.  This is what they call the world that used to thrive with life.  Green fields and dense forests.  Vast oceans and blue rivers.  Plants and wild life.  Nature.   Such a beautiful world; it seemed like a fantasy.  It was perfect for those of great intelligence that lived on this world.  Perfect enough to consume every last resource they could get their greedy hands on and drained every last part of the planet’s life.  This planet used to be called Earth. A boring yet different and unique name.
So unlike compared to the other planets around it.
    Earth.
    Thousands of years ago, it was known for its astounding lands and waters.  It was a world to admire. The planet is still called Earth, but people just…thought it would be nice to give it a nickname. One that went with the planet in its current situation. Because now, not one creature can naturally breathe on this horrific planet.
    Humans.  After their work of pollution and radiation couldn’t go any further, fake oxygen had to be constantly pumped into the lower atmosphere. But that wasn’t enough as microbes were injected into people to filter the air they breathed  into oxygen. Plants and animals were long gone extinct. The population dropped from 20 billion to less than a million. It was as if humans wanted to destroy themselves and the world they lived in.
    The Earth cried for help. It didn’t want this to happen. She called and cried as loud as she could. But as time went on, Earth gave up…and let the people dry her up.

Now, Earth’s cry has finally been answered.
Hey, my favorite people on the social web!
I would like to introduce to you a story that I am currently writing!
(lol, yes, I am creative in other ways too)

I started this story for as long as I can remember back in elementary school and for so many years I have revised and revised and changed a lot of things but now I can finally start writing and showing it around!

PLEASE READ THIS!!! I need to know what you think and what I could do better! and know if you like th story so far, even if its a prologue!

This story takes place in the year 6295. tons of new worlds have been discovered, space travel has already been invented, all technology has been well beyond advanced. Yet, Earth, a meesly old and small planet, is almost dead and it is up to the two most powerful beings in the world (created by the galazy) to try and save Earth. 
(Not the best descripstion but a tiny background)

Hope you like it!!
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Paskiz Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think its up to a good start, we just have to see what eventually saves the earth!
I like it so far! ^w^)b
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icetree13 Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol that is if the earth is saved! Who knows!!!
Thanks!!
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ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hmmm, i have to say nice work. seems like captain planet.
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icetree13 Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks! I'm sorry, but i've never heard of captain planet!
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ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a hero who's all about saving the ecosystem and stuff. recycle, and doing what you got to do save mother earth,
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icetree13 Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yeah, I never heard of that, but my story is much different than that, at least I hope it is >w<
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ArcNovaXIII Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
meh, we'll see how it works out!
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icetree13 Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hope so!!
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